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Broken II – Captive

Why have you brought me here?
Have I not been mocked enough?

I’ve seen the way they look at me
Must they judge me here for all eternity?

I’ve already served my time on earth.
I’ve been your living example of what not to do
a perpetrator, a deceiver, a subhuman creature
giving in to every lust and putrid desire

My presence here would only cause others to sin.
I’d bloody paradise. I’d take life again.

I’ve had to live with me, why must others suffer as well?

I shouldn’t be here.
I shouldn’t be.
Damn you for bringing forth a soul like mine.

Send me back. Destroy me. Just don’t keep me here.

Not with them.

But what do you do when beauty forces herself upon you?

When her love burns more than the flames of hell?

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  • A_L August 19, 2009, 4:50 pm

    Your last two posts have been intense. I really don't know what to say, but can't let them go by without commenting.
    I imagine most of us can see something of ourselves in Broken I–we all have the capacity to do things others find disgusting, repulsive, or shameful. Not only the capacity to do them, but likely the experience, and all that goes with it.
    It's all very powerful, but the last three lines are particularly poignant:
    "Could you find it in you to forgive me? To love me?

    I can’t promise that I’ll stop.

    Could you hold me close if I came near?"

    Broken II has it's own pathos, and raises deep questions.
    "Damn you for bringing forth a soul like mine."

    I hope you share what has moved you to write something so dark yet incredibly poetic–and (hopefully) very thought-provoking.

  • lon August 20, 2009, 8:43 pm

    Hey Al – thanks for commenting and following along! … especially since i switched back to intensedebate, and i know you hate it. haha. The posts were just exercises in some creative writing… my wife was a bit disturbed as well. I think i might have another post or two to tie it together…

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